Lotus Last Rites Of Passion

Remember winter
stark, bitter cold, white air, frosty clear
remember playing the dead-eye of ones youth
when all this was fun

now; remember the balmy age
beneath the printed lion duvet
wriggling it gone
descending side of the bed

remember refusing the mission position
a comfortable cowgirl instead
sundering deliberate lilts
a determine pace

freeing heat
steam the lotus bloom
upon a solid stem
scaling dampness on her skins centre bone
pointed nips; seize a gratifying skim

tangle into a fresh morning
ponder a stay
forgoing the immediate departure
dawning aurora
streams linear
motif ochre homo sapiens

melding triads
Phil Schaap intro
devotion to Charlie Parker; Birds in Flight
births chivalrous jive

"It's Sunday Morning!" with Charles Osgood
fresh perspective on our world
we live for days like this
where there is nothing else I'd rather do
than spend it with you

© 2011 Lepadah




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From: SparkyDashforth (SparkyDashforth)
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Most excellent write.

You are goood.!

 

sparky


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From: GuyBlakeKett (GuyBlakeKett)
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Posted: May 14 11 07:36 AM
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what a delight this is! full of sensual erotic music. think you might want to clean up final line -- "nothing else I'd rather do than to spend it with you" -- as is, you've got an errant semi-colon in there, and "I" cries out to be "I'd." Typos I expect.

but what a delight!

cheers,
Guy