Player playing
isolate mind's eye
fluid body politics
conflict columns compass
upon altar
strange crooked beings
acquire quakes akin to mine
one needed a beloved
less wane jewels to freaks
man . . .
you were once the perfect whim
tender enormous rhythms, polemics & birdie Haiku
happy with the Motown sound
set in old wax; newly found
soft-pedaling down memory lane
"Ooh-oo child" up the 5 Stairsteps
ascend empyrean
Ooo-oo . . . soulful real
frequent obscurity
awaiting lavender morning's
I resent a box kisser
did you not understand
man . . . a request for an unwrinkled smooch
© 2012 Lepadah
From: trkyounger (trkyounger) Obatala
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Lep,
I've attempted to put this poem into English! lol
I know
you are a Player's player
but you isolate my mind's
eye. There's no conflict when
you have my legs in the air like
columns. You don't need a compass
to find that spot.
Put me on a altar. We become strange
crooked beings that shove and quacks.
Who needs jewels? We freaks.
Man, you were once the perfect whim, lay,
tender enormous thick rhythms polemics and bird
Haiku. We were happy with the Motown Sound, like an
ol skool record set in old wax. We soft pedaled down memory
lane like 'ooooooh child things are gonna be easier. OOOOh child 5 Stairstepping me to heaven, soo sooo Soulful Real.
Now your heat is less frequent. Obscure. I want lavender mornings. I resent this, this pat on the cheek! Do you not understand? I want my man back! My man!
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lol Thank you Brother Oba,
Nice attempt . . . English you jest (lol)
1) "player" is a video player
2) the conflict was other women
3) columns being their legs
4) compass meaning many directions
5) the value of an relationship change into superhead freak
6) the man back . . . not
The words are gifts offered abstraction.
by the way love word is "quake" not "quack."
But love your take lol
Peace 1 lepadah
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as your mentor i'm telling you to be less 'smart' and more simplistic. You are too important of an writer to have us play guessing games with your words.... Insular is not writing techniques... be nice... share with us... let us play too!
Yours,
T. Obatala-Obalajii- Kimathe- Jetta
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Your poem fascinated me lepadah.....the language in it.....it sings!
Most favourite lines, of many in it, for me....
"I resent a box kisser
did you not understand
man . . . a request for an unwrinkled smooch "
I also really enjoyed the exchanges that followed between obatala and you.....so good when that happens.....I felt like a fly on a wall....listening to you both bounce off each other.
:)
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From: trkyounger (trkyounger)
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..awww thank you baby but all that trying to get on my good side aint wots poppin!!! Could you throw in a couple of nouns and dumb it down a little for us un-ejamacated- folks....????
Read Carolyn Forche...
you are right there...
really
peace
obatala
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haha so funny oba. Point made . . . match. But you guys on this forum is creme de la creme of high brows since joining in 2000 whoa! You, Farkas, Guy, Dreamboat, Mapovia, Cumin, 68, where is Yankee Dog, Jewel Moon and the list is endless you know that. Love you all big time. We match point all day tap. lol
Peace 1 always Lepadah
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The bantering back and forth here is worth almost as much fun as
reading the poem...which is very good all by itself ;)
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From: trkyounger (trkyounger) Obatala
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...my carrot on top of the big fish eating friend of mine! You know that you are my strong peoples. I love your work, your spoken word is simply fantastic and the time we went out to go see Cassandra Wilson on Valentine's Day is one of the best memories i will carry to my grave!!!!!!
Did I do good?
Do you forgive me, love-lump?
Huh??????????
Peace
Obatala
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Awe but of course Oba . . . you my peoples lol. You know West 4th diner the big fish haha.
Peace always Lepadah
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Enough of this teasing you two....you've got me salivating....
"You know West 4th diner the big fish haha. "
any chance of a joint poem about this from you two here....'taint fair to tickle taste buds at just the thought of it.
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Posted: Jan 17 12 01:17 PM
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...ok Lep lets do this!!! Am going to jot down some of our fondest memories because Lord knows you are always doing something... If my moms were alive she would call you very fresh and me mannish... lol
peace
obatala
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